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Story of the Blanks - Original by aoshistark Story of the Blanks - Original by aoshistark

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Best read in the middle of the night, with no lights on save the flashlight you use to read it while under your covers.

!! ATTENTION !!

This fic has undergone lengthy revision. If you would like to see the new revised adaption of the story it is here: aoshistark.deviantart.com/art/…


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Short story written with permission by the owner of the newgrounds flash-game: Story of the Blanks. www.newgrounds.com/portal/view…

Author: :iconaoshistark:
Editor: :iconscorch238:
Original Cover-Art by: :iconaqnichols:
Original Characters by: Donitz of newgrounds
My Little Pony is copyright by Hasbro.

UPDATE!

Now you can listen to a reading of this on :iconjackallen:'s YouTube channel! Check it out here:  www.youtube.com/watch?v=kDkMVr…
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:iconbruiser128:
bruiser128 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I loved this story line quite a lot.
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:iconsoliassoul:
Soliassoul Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice drawing. I really liked the story, but I just wish there was more appreciation for it. Pity. But your drawing is very good.
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:iconkendell2:
Kendell2 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
Wow! Great job! This story is awesome!
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:icondearself:
DearSelf Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
I love it, it's better than the game. But I'm still confused with a lot of things. :o
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:iconrandime:
Randime Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Student General Artist
So the Blanks were cursed for the murder of an innocent pony? I still don't get why they would kill her in the first place?
I'm such a noob for asking these questions :stupidme:
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
Ah, see, these are the problems with the original story that the revision fixes completely. Go take a look at the revised story over here: [link]

It will answer a lot of those plot-holey questions.
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:iconshirokusakabe:
ShiroKusakabe Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
say, i got a good question and i don't know anyone else to ask... cronollogically speaking, when is supposed to take place the story of the blanks? if you aren't sure, at least say, is it supposed to happen before or after discord's attack?
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
Well, the original flash was made back in the first season so if I had to pick a place where Story of the Blanks would have happened it would probably be somewhere near the middle of season one. Possibly after Winter Wrap Up.
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:iconshirokusakabe:
ShiroKusakabe Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
ok, thanks a lot, im writing my first fic ever, is related to the blanks and discord appears, so i need to get straight some things because i want it to fit the better possible tha canon, and the fanon when there`s no canon xD
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
Sure Sure. NP at all. :)
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:iconshirokusakabe:
ShiroKusakabe Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
emm... what does NP means? ^^u
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
Sorry. Short for "No Problem"
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:iconshirokusakabe:
ShiroKusakabe Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
oh... ok then! thank you very much
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:icondavy-downpour:
davy-downpour Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
ive been hunting for blank stuff for awhile thanks so much!!!! :D
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:icontori-the-eevee1234:
Tori-the-Eevee1234 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwwwwwww....... Happy ending! :D I played the game myself... I nearly shat myself when the zombies started chasing me. :icontruestoryplz:
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:iconspeedcow12:
speedcow12 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i played the game before i read this
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012
and how do you feel the story held up to the gameplay?
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:iconspeedcow12:
speedcow12 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
story is kinda better
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:icontoadjacara:
ToaDJacara Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
Nice :)
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:iconthesoulseekerhu:
TheSoulseekerHU Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
Hello there. :)
I have read the Story of the Blanks you wrote(which is pretty cool,I think),and I would like to ask you if you let me to translate it to Hungarian.
And another question would be,if you let me to,then which Story would you recommend to be translated (the original or the revised one) ?

Thank you!
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
If you want to translate it that's ok with me. Though I like both versions I think I'd recommend the revised edition. But, you should wait a little before working on that because I'm going to be updating the revision soon and you'll miss the new additions to the story if you start working on it now.
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:iconthesoulseekerhu:
TheSoulseekerHU Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
Okay.
Until then,I'll start to revise my translating skills and get ready. :)

Thank you again! :hug:
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
Yup. NP. If you watch me I'm going to set the revision file here to notify everyone when its been updated so you can monitor it.
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:iconidliketosmokeatree:
IdLikeToSmokeATree Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
Looks fine to me, dude.

If EqD doesn't like it, fuck 'em. I found it very enjoyable, and an excellent rendition of the source material.

Good work!
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
Thanks, you've pretty much summed up my feelings by now on this whole mess. :\
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:iconidliketosmokeatree:
IdLikeToSmokeATree Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
Yeah, I'm sorry that they kept trying to bend you in uncomfortable directions. You did what you set out to do, though, so that's really all that matters.
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
Eh? how were you doing that? ...

Apology accepted either way, though i dunno if it was necessary. I was agreeing with your first comment that I'm pretty much fed up with the whole ordeal. Glad you like it too. :)
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:iconidliketosmokeatree:
IdLikeToSmokeATree Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
I was apologizing for them! Empathy! But yeah. Now I just need to read To Trot a Mile.
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2012
yay! read all the things!
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Leiliel1 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011
Not pictured:

*Applebloom, Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle at the entrance to Sunny Town*

Scootaloo: Ready girls?

Sweetie: I'm ready, how about you?

Applebloom: ...eep?

Scootaloo: ...I'll take that as "yes"?

*CMCs turn around, revealing proton packs attached to them*

*strike pose*

All: CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS, GHOSTBUSTERS!

*ghostbusters theme plays as they charge in*
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:iconwarriorsparrow:
WarriorSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
Crossover. Someone. Make it. Now.
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011
There's an amazing Crossover Fan fiction in the making right there. ;P
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:iconmakaishinsei-shinki:
Makaishinsei-Shinki Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011
You know, playing that little Flash game actually put me on my way to becoming a Brony.

Now I look at this, and can't help but think "Holy shit it's the novelization of the game! Only, it doesn't suck!"

Seriously, good job there. This was actually a quite creepy read.
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:iconrabukurafuto:
Rabukurafuto Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011   Writer
Wonderful work. I just played the game, then read the story. You did an excellent job adapting this eerie work.
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:iconmusicalmutt2:
Musicalmutt2 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Student General Artist
b'aw, it won't show up for me :(
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:iconnobody-kadaj:
nobody-kadaj Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011
Is this on Equestria Daily?
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
No. Not yet anyway... The pre-readers over at EQDaily felt the fic was a little too much of a re-telling and were afraid people who hadn't played the game itself wouldn't like it. They let me opt to revise the fic before final submission so now Scorch and I are working on the revised adaption of the story. It should be ready in a few days actually.

Once the revision is done I'll be submitting both the original and revised copies to EQdaily and uploading the revised copy here.
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:icondaimera:
Daimera Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011
Haha, found this via TVTropes.

Brilliant! Loved the game, love this. It's also extremely cool to see it has the blessing of the game's creator!
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
Glad you like it. :)
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:iconvimykins:
Vimykins Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wauw.... That was scary... And quite well written too! Nice job! :clap:
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011
Thank you. Sooner or later the revised copy is going to be ready to go. School's just been getting in the way.
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:iconvimykins:
Vimykins Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll be looking forward to it. and yeah school allways gets in the way of something.:D
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011
yea. Boo responsibility, I just wanna write about PONIES!
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:iconvimykins:
Vimykins Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Woohoo PONIES!! :iconepiclaplz:
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:icontaren14:
Taren14 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011
Never mind, I got it. It was pretty good. A few spelling and punctuation errors here and there, but otherwise good.
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011
oh, well...glad you got it? :P
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:icontaren14:
Taren14 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011
You need to do this in reguar literature form -_- I know there's art that goes with it, but I can't see it.
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:iconplcthecd:
PLCTheCd Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011
I also realized something, if only Pinkie Pie taught Applebloom to giggle at the ghosties!

Or do the thriller dance...:)
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:iconaoshistark:
aoshistark Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
Wow. I really should check my DA more often. Thank you all so much for the words of praise. Now, I have some bad news concerning the fic...

I did, in fact, submit this to EQ daily immediately after uploading it here. Seth passed it onto the Pre-Readers who largely didn't like it. Every single one admitted that they did not play the game, ergo they felt that clearly they were missing something. None the less, they gave me the option to withdraw my submission if I felt that the story wouldn't hit as hard with people who HADN'T played the game.

I took the offer and have decided to take a little more artistic liberty with the story (as long as Donitz doesn't mind of course). The revision of Blanks is going to add a lot more in-depth development about Sunny Town and the fate of poor poor Ruby. It seemed to be the two things the pre-readers wanted the most, so I'm gonna try my best to give it to em without compromising the story.

Either way, If this revision is successful I'll make sure to update this fiction accordingly and make note of it in the title. Till then, Thank you again. :)
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:iconmetaxzero:
metaXzero Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011
Wow, people really don't have much of an imagination these days. Always needing stuff to be spoonfed. What happned to using your imagination to fill in the obvious and easy to feed cracks.

But oh well, hope your revision comes out great.
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